That Weak Kneed Moment

[grover]

How many of you know and love that weak kneed moment when you're getting fucked and your knees buckle as you lose yourself in the moment? This is from a novel I am writing...

"Joe positioned himself behind the man and, with one fell push, shoved it in all the way up his ass. The man gasped in both pain and intense pleasure. Joe began humping him furiously, roughly, with hard, brutal thrusts. No gentle love-making here, not even a polite screw. Joe ravaged the man ass, and both men enjoyed it immensely. He held him in place by the shoulders at first then moved them down to his hips. The young man pushed himself hard back against Joe trying to get every inch in. God it felt good. He squeezed his ass some trying to slow the pounding down... not that he cared. He liked it rough, but he it wanted to last. He wanted to lose himself in the act, until his whole consciousness was focused on that point where Joe’s penis and his asshole met. Until all he was, all he felt, was the man inside him. Filling him. Screwing him. The motion, the grittiness, his own stretched anus. Sex. He was so hot he was trembling. His knees were weak and buckled ever so slightly."

That moment, not when you come necessarily, but when your eyes roll up in your head and you lose yourself until all you are is that point of intensely pleasurable contact.

[Bassman777]

How many of you know and love that weak kneed moment when you're getting fucked and your knees buckle as you lose yourself in the moment? This is from a novel I am writing...

"Joe positioned himself behind the man and, with one fell push, shoved it in all the way up his ass. The man gasped in both pain and intense pleasure. Joe began humping him furiously, roughly, with hard, brutal thrusts. No gentle love-making here, not even a polite screw. Joe ravaged the man ass, and both men enjoyed it immensely. He held him in place by the shoulders at first then moved them down to his hips. The young man pushed himself hard back against Joe trying to get every inch in. God it felt good. He squeezed his ass some trying to slow the pounding down... not that he cared. He liked it rough, but he it wanted to last. He wanted to lose himself in the act, until his whole consciousness was focused on that point where Joe’s penis and his asshole met. Until all he was, all he felt, was the man inside him. Filling him. Screwing him. The motion, the grittiness, his own stretched anus. Sex. He was so hot he was trembling. His knees were weak and buckled ever so slightly."

That moment, not when you come necessarily, but when your eyes roll up in your head and you lose yourself until all you are is that point of intensely pleasurable contact.

Is that from experience or imagination? Asking for a friend, lol.

[Coastocoast]

It is more porn novel writing.

[Tight1-4u]

I know this moment well, but for me it is more the moment he enters my pussy.. feeling him pushing and entering me takes my breath away and get weak in the knees.. my eyes roll back in my head and I enjoy all the anticipation and excitement of him becoming joined in me!! Then he we start fucking and yes I bounce on his cock to help drive him in deeper.. I love feeling him in me.. my pleasure and sexual intensity grows from there.. it starts with soft moans and low grunts to if he fucks me well and a long time to me being quite loud and loosing myself in the moment and nothing in the world matters except him fucking me.. all I want is to be in that moment and for him to be fucking me and planting his seed deep inside of me.. do his best to make me pregnant.. that is really what it is about.. him spreading his seed.. I love it!!

[grover]

Experience.

[grover]

Your critique of that passage made me rewrite it some. In the novel the guy doing the fucking is a severely repressed homosexual sadist. He is also an FBI agent. I couldn't just write he was a severely repressed homosexual sadist who has sex with men in public bathrooms and then beats them to a pulp as he does this guy. It just doesn't work. I had to show it to drive home the point. After reading the above I rewrote it so its less graphic but still explicit.

[KDaddy23]

Why didn't it work as you originally wrote the passage... other than the guy is an FBI agent? When I write erotica, the hardest thing to do and to keep in mind is describing how the sex went down and how my characters are feeling and thinking about it - and without sounding corny about it. After reading the passage you provided, I wouldn't have used the phrase, "...with one fell push;" I would have left out the word "fell" and maybe used "swift" or even "brutal" instead.

Just me.

[grover]

Because it isn't a porno novel. It has two sex scenes, one gay, one straight and one rape. I didn't write the scene to be erotic. More to show what a fucked up mess of a man he is which makes his psychological collapse later in the novel more realistic.

[Cum1st]

I've had something like the weak kneed experience in your story. It wasn't a collapsing. My knees slowly, unconsciously straightened reducing penetration. I definitely was enjoying his cock stroking in me all the way. I just didn't realize I was doing it until he gently pushed my hips down. After that I made it a point to keep my asshole at the optimum level whenever he was in it.